Jessica Szhor fashion review


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hi everyone!

I want to be a fashion reporter and I wrote this review of Jessica's fashion. Please read it and let me know if you think it's a good article or not. I need helping choosing what to do in life and I know I love writing, fashion, and Gossip Girl so I'm trying to combine the three loves with some hard work.

Thanks! xoxo


READ MY REVIEW, PLEASE

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Jan 14, 2009 12:49PM EST

Hey! As a journalist myself I'd like to give you a hint or two, is that ok?First, you shouldn't write the same way you talk. Planification is the key, you must know where you are going with your piece. It looks as if there was some planification, but from reading it I can tell you didn't come to a conclusion. Does she or doesn't she make good choices? Obviously she doesn't, so maybe you could conclude the article by giving some advice or something.Second, be careful about the way you write. Journalists are supposed to be objective. And you should check your spelling, punctuation, etc. If you neglect commas and periods people won't get your point.Last, If you really want to become a reporter, practice is everything. Keep on writing and asking for opinions, sometimes they're harsh but they help. You've got a lot of potential, you just need to practice a little more.I hope you find my comments helpful, and remember I'm here to help you anytime!Good luck!

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Jan 16, 2009 8:07PM EST

hey!although its a good attempt, aren't some of those outfits right out of the show? cause i know that she doesn't exactly get to decide what she wears on the show, and therefore probably shouldn't get judged for it... since those are not HER fashion mistakes, but that's only for some of the pics not all of them

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